hidan166
Noob
Yoru ni yasashii yoake
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Post by hidan166 on Feb 2, 2009 20:08:26 GMT -5
(sorry im relly new at this)
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Post by SecretLightningNinja on Feb 2, 2009 22:23:27 GMT -5
((Sorry, not really my business, but I do suggest beefing up your postings. Try to add some excitement into your writing, don't be wordy, but go into more detail. It makes it more fun to read and write. I go over my post once or twice before I post it to check for errors. Ex. Aki ran down the street and jumped over a barrel. He was being chased by men in black, he didn't know why. Aki glanced behind him as he ran around a corner. But what he didn't see was the wall. He ran into the wall, and fell. From behind him the men in black had blocked the alleyway entrance, Aki looked at the wall, it was much to big to climb, he had to fight.  Have Fun)) |
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Post by Eden on Feb 3, 2009 0:22:24 GMT -5
Rumor sighed blasting the disco knives with a Vak Don spell. "Don't get over excited and try to keep a level heav.
(Lessons 4 and 5 first try to always post your HP and SP at the end of a post when your in a battle so that you don't forget and people reading don't get confused. Plus if ou post the monsters HP and SP then it makes it really easy to follow and to show when it dies. Also Don't get lost in a post. Just now you adressed Rei but she isn't in the post)
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Katnip
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Post by Katnip on Feb 5, 2009 18:54:24 GMT -5
mianso warped into the field
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Post by dreadscar on Feb 5, 2009 18:59:27 GMT -5
looked at all the people around him.
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Post by videogamemaster on Feb 5, 2009 19:00:18 GMT -5
"im here humans now were are the monster i need to kill something soon"sead hacker
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Post by dreadscar on Feb 5, 2009 19:01:12 GMT -5
pulled out his big sword as he hefted it over his shoulder ready to kill whatever is in his way.
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Katnip
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Post by Katnip on Feb 5, 2009 19:03:09 GMT -5
well i know this field really well theres certain areas were theres no monsters like my hide out and hotsprings and the orchards but there areas were there plenty of monsters" said mianso
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Post by dreadscar on Feb 5, 2009 19:04:00 GMT -5
" show us the way Mianso."
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Katnip
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Post by Katnip on Feb 5, 2009 19:04:17 GMT -5
ok lets go he said pulling out his daggers and walked into the woods
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Post by videogamemaster on Feb 5, 2009 19:04:50 GMT -5
(hey have you guys hered of the new .hack game thats coming out) "hmmm i dount trust dark that much i think hes hiding something about the hackers of this world"she sead in a low vioce
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Post by dreadscar on Feb 5, 2009 19:05:09 GMT -5
followed misano with his big sword in tow into the vibrant lush and giant forest.
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fev201
Junior Member
The Elite Ninja
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Post by fev201 on Feb 5, 2009 19:05:26 GMT -5
dark followed them in to the woods
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Katnip
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Post by Katnip on Feb 5, 2009 19:07:03 GMT -5
(oh the one they said wasnt coming to usa)
"i first met dark in the net slums hes friends with rei whos also been to the net slums........
ive said to much" mianso said
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Post by dreadscar on Feb 5, 2009 19:07:16 GMT -5
becomes very quite as he walks behind mianson stalking the are his eyes trained on whatever will leap out in front of him.
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Have Fun))
